In order to make my essay better, I need to add more detail to my argument as suggested by my classmates. I plan to develop the opposition to the junk food tax a little more and include another reason why the tax would not be detrimental to citizens’ paychecks. I will elaborate my definition of obesity in order to make clearer what is classified as obese. I also need to tailor the ending to fit more in the Rogerian style by combining the opposing view of the tax with ways the promoting side sees advantageous. By the time my essay is complete it will be longer and more persuasive towards installing a tax on junk food!
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